Bargain Hidden
DESPERATELY need help? 10 points! Please help me edit this sentence?
I have one paragraph that doesn’t sound quite right. Can you help me by adding anything you want or revising the words to make it sound more interesting? Thank you so much! I will choose best answer!
But advertising’s mysteries go far beyond colors! In fact, here’s a lil secret. The next time you walk inside a market or store, go left. Researchers have discovered the majority of people go right when entering a store, thus shops advertise its most expensive products on the right, leaving the best bargains hidden off to the left. Furthermore, make sure to pay close attention to the music played while shopping. More than often, slow music is played, subliminally inclining us to walk slower, therefore exposing is to a wider spectrum of items.
I wouldn’t start the paragraph with “But”, and you could add another sentence about the supermarkets’ evil ways if you wanted to, but I think it sounds pretty good. It’s interesting and funny. You write well.